Ik moet een sollicitatie brief schrijven voor school en nu heb ik dit:
Dear Sir or Madam,
In the newspaper of 10 September, I saw a vacancy for a carpenter. That’s exactly what I’m looking for.
I’m very good in that kind of stuff(Dit zou ik veranderen, kan zelf nu ff niks bedenken . I am the person you
r looking for.
Now I’m explaining you why I’m the best for this job. (verander in: Please allow me to explain why you should hire me for this vacancy.
A long time ago I’ve
succeeded for(verander in: Completed my carpenter training and painters training). I had very great figures for both. In 2003 I was working for a painters company
. It was a great time.Veranderen in (,i had a wonderful time.) But the working hours were
terrible(zou ik veranderen in zoiets: But the working hours were not to my liking. I couldn’t do anything in the evening because I had to do things for my job(zou ik veranderen in: Because i had to work in the evenings i hardly had any time for myself.
By carpenter is that different(deze snap ik niet echt). Great working hours and a great company.
I’ve heard from a lot of people they like it there.(Some of your employees have told me that
bedrijfsnaam hieris a great company, with a good atmosphere.
Also I live near the company.
I live in Greensville and that’s 15 minutes driving. That’s not far. vervangen doorWich is about a 15 minute drive away from your company.)
I really hope
you will consider my application and i hope to hear from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Je naam
Die laatste alinea moet ik nog doen en die tweede en derde nog verbeteren. Maar zitten er veel fouten in, is het goede informatie? Wat kan ik er allemaal nog bij doen?
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